Wednesday, November 13, 2019

The disease part 1

One day a boy named Karangutan. He was born with a disease called Red transformation jutsu it’s when the person with the disease touched someone they would turn red and start chasing people and then they would get the disease and then it will keep going. So Dr.Dolittle saw the news and then started making the cure so he made the formula and the ingredients were a sock, toenails, foot fungus, and a computer. They will go back to normal is when you make them touch the cure. Then Dr.Dolittle made the people with the disease touch it.


  1. You don't need to add at the beginning "he" you can just say " One day a boy named Karangutan was....

  2. your red doesn't have to be capital

  3. add a period after jutsu.
    but good story