Tuesday, November 12, 2019

Red and the Well

Once upon a time there was a little girl named Red. She was the brightest little girl you can find. On her way to school Red fell in a well and didn’t know what to do, so she started crying very, very loud. Luckily a stranger named Bob heard Red crying so he rushed to the well and called 911 to help the poor little girl. As the minutes went by Bob kept Red in company and told her not to cry and that everything’s going to be fine. After an hour the fire department finally came and saved Red.

2 comments:

  1. Hi Artimes, I really enjoyed your short story. One thing to think about - keep your tenses the same, so where you said 'everything's going to be fine' it should be 'everything would be fine.'
    :) Ms N

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  2. What an unfortunate accident Artimes, but lucky that Bob was nearby and good to hear that the fire service saved the day. I wonder how Red fell in the well? What might she have been doing beforehand ... or perhaps not doing do you think?
    Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.

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